PE Behaviorals Feedback

Hi all - putting together PE behaviorals right now and looking for some feedback before I effectively lock in these answers and start getting mock interview reps. I know there are a handful of former and current PE professionals who altruistically offer their help on this site so thought I'd put this one out there whilst specifying that I am willing to offer additional financial compensation as well. Ideally, looking for those who've taken many interviews and/or helped many students, and thus know what the patterns of goods and bads really look like.

Job would essentially be that I'd send over a Word doc with my behaviorals, you'd offer comments / edits, and we'd repeat until we feel that the answers are interview-ready. Likely only a few hours of work on a flexible timeline.