Pitch in coffee chat or better to stay concise?

Hi monkeys,
Target school stem major w/incoming sa at bb here. After my sa stint, I only have one semester of school left and want to do an off cycle internship at a boutique/lmm energy/infra fund. Have been doing cold outreaches to alum with a very low response rate.

In some messages, I’ve been keeping it very concise, and in some I’ve been including an investing question/a potential underserved market (3-4 sentences) and am wondering whether it’s better to keep it concise or include this so the message is more interesting?

Would like to hear your thoughts.

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