Please review my Resume, specifically the 2 bullet points in red in the first section. Thanks for the input!
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My only advice would be to remove your name and email on the top.
Remove your GPA. You graduated about 6 years ago and it's definitely not going to help you. You seem well qualified and then BOOM your 3.5 GPA smacks you in the face. It shouldn't be a deal breaker by any sense but I would take it out.
Anyway - your resume needs a rewrite. Reformat to M&I format. Too much space is occupied by positions that you held for only a few months and are too far in the past to focus on. What did you do first two years out of school (not that you necessarily need to list that on your resume)?
You need more specifics on what you did and what the results of your work were. I get that a portfolio analyst analyzes portfolios and a credit analyst analyzes credit, but the whole thing just reads a bit generic. Maybe that's the nature of BB work but still. Voice is wrong in parts (esp. use of first person). Change to a "selected transactions" / "selected projects" format and go in-depth on at least a couple of transactions/projects.
Good luck, Joshua.
Thanks so much!
I'd probably add a small "Additional Information" section at the bottom and remove/condense your Relative Coursework. In the Additional Information section have things like: Hobbies, Interests, Languages, Skills, Volunteer Work, Sports, Certifications etc. Obviously not all of them, but add something to your resume that humanizes you, makes you stand out, and can possibly connect you with the person reading your resume.
Just my 2 cents
Thanks for the feedback everyone. Anyone have any thoughts on the 2 bullets in the first section that are in red? I added those recently and want to make sure I get the verbiage right.
Still looking for some specific feedback or wordsmithing on the 2 bullet points in red at the top of the resume. Thanks
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