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Idk if it's just me but it is strikingly obvious that you're in Queens Commerce.
Dude, WAYYYY too much going on there (the margins are painful). No one's going to read all that.
Hi, thanks a lot for the feedback. I just tried to cut down my bullets and fix up the margins; I just re-uploaded the fixed/updated resume. would you say this is less painful to the eyes? thanks!
The margins are better, but still way too much going on.
The entire first experience is just an enormous clutter. Break it down into distinct bullet points. Follow the rule of keeping bullet points to 1.5-2 lines max.
thanks a ton for the critique; seems to be consensus that the resume has too much cluster, esp for the first experience!
I cut down significantly and posted a second version, would you say this is more reasonable?
thank you again in advance
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