Resume Review - UK Grad Recruiting

FYI, when you mention specific deals, all it takes is a second on google to figure out which bank you were at. Anyway, here's where I think you can improve:

-The course in Mandarin Chinese; not sure how much value it adds, as it is only a few months, and takes up three lines of your resume -I feel that your formatting choice limits you, as your bullets are so severely indented you can't put in as much detail -I'm not sure about the underlining in the New South Wales section -As is usually said, try to quantify what you did some more. you worked on some high profile deals and had good experience, but what exactly did you do on those deals? -bullet points shouldn't have periods or multiple sentences -your extracurricular "executive" - the one bullet you have goes on way too long; each of those should be a single bullet, or at most two items to a bullet. figure out what adds value and retain it, but don't have such a long single bullet -you've got room on the bottom margin if you need it -hedge fund: what did the fact sheets show/conclude -you're on the other side of the pond, so not too sure about this, but I think listing every course you've ever taken (with the exception of first year) is a bit excessive - feel that space could be better used for work experience, as you're not lacking for that