Please critique and tear my resume a new one
Hi I'm currently a rising 3rd year (school is a 5 year program) and I was just looking for some critiques on my resume. I'm currently looking for a winter internship/co-op next semester at an investment bank.
Under the CPG company there are a lot of bullet points and I think it may be too long/hard to read. I'd appreciate any feedback you guys have for me.
Also, I've recently completed the BIWS Modeling Fundamentals course, should I include that in my CV?
Thanks a lot! !
Very solid experience. Maybe drop the high school section and fill the blank with extracurricular works. BIWS can go into skills section. I personally like to describe the general responsibilities and list achievements/star projects in bullet points, because employers would like to get a more detailed insights on the projects you handled. I have worked FT for two years so my suggestion might not be suitable for rising junior.
Thanks for the feedback.
I've gotten many comments on taking out my high school information, so I'm probably going to do that.
Do you feel like my experiences under the CPG company are too cramped and condensed? I'm getting a small impression that there are too many bullet points or that it's too much information. However, they're all very relevant and representative of my responsibilities and projects I've worked on in those 6 months. What do you think?
Thanks again for the response.
If I were you I'd probably do it like this: Conducted strategic analysis, for finance department. Provided brand support by creating P&L reports and forecasting. Key achievements include: -Project A... -Project B....
I might be wrong, but for a half-year internship, I would expect to see you doing the same stuff as junior level FT staffs. So there should be some shining achievements instead of general description of responsibilities.
Okay you asked for it...
3.6/4.0 3.8/4.0; who cares about the extra digit of precision, just round up
I would leave out "Chinese" under interests since you have it in "Minor," your work experience, and "Skills." Also, I would not separate "Computer" skills, just put it with the others, also looks weird to say conversational Mandarin is your only skill
There is a different amount of spacing in your work experience between lines, I would quadruple check the spaces before/after paragraph, that it's all single or 1.5 or double or whatever, as long as it's consistent
Take off high school (unless it's super prestigious like Andover or Exeter)
Delete periods at the end of any bullet point (as I have done here to demonstrate)
I don't see many "results" in the resume bullet points. I would try to quantify more e.g. how many companies did you identify, any idea of size, etc.
"equipment/workspace," has a comma at the end with nothing afterward, also just delete one of the words, who cares. By the way, same hanging comma with "Java (Eclipse),"
I would delete "Familiar with" Eclipse since it's the only thing under "Familiar" and I have no idea how to parse the difference between "Proficient" and "Familiar." Besides, computer languages mean nothing for IB recruiting so you're safe leaving off anything that's not super important to you
You have a period after "July." in your work experience but not after "June"
I think it's weird to have so many more bullet points for your CRG internship than your banking internship if you're interested in recruiting for banking. Didn't you model or at least help analyze models? I don't see anything quantitative in your banking experience like DCF, LBO, comps, precedent transactions, operating model, benchmarking, etc. Your IB experience is 1000x more interesting and valuable than your CRG experience, you'll never use the latter unless you're recruiting for an industry-specific team
Reading [genre] is so much more interesting than just "Reading." It's like, what do you like to read? Just say "Reading biographies" and then I can ask you what's your favorite or most recent biography you've read, and we can have a conversation, instead of "So... you like reading, huh? Want to read some 10-k's?"
Probably more but have to get back to work!
Haha you slaughtered me... thanks for the advice I really appreciate it; I agree with a lot of your points.
As for the FP&A internship, the reason I have so many is because I was working FT for 6 full months, so I worked on a lot of projects and a lot of responsibilities.
The IB one in China was only for one month, and deal flow was extremely limited; so I unfortunately didn't get any exposure to financial modeling. Most of my work was researching various life science industries and companies in the US. For example, one of their clients was a VR surgical navigation company, and they asked me to find the top competitors in the US and make a powerpoint on it. Since that's the case, would keeping that on my resume be a liability and look bad since there was no quantitative work?
Thanks so much for the help.
Makes sense, still, I would try to stretch as much as possible what you did. When you outlined the top competitors in the US, couldn't you say something like "Created PowerPoint presentation benchmarking Client company against major US competitors including operational and financial metrics, helping our Client to screen potential [partners / buyers / acquisition targets]"
EDIT: you can also include the BIWS training modules if you have extra space after deleting high school, they have a guide/template for exactly how to include that in your resume.
Lets face it, if you can run someone through a DCF you can add it yo your CV. They wont call your Chinese boutique to make sure you did a DCF - they will only check the fact that you interned there.
You have desolated his CV, please let me know if you are up for one more :)
I'll do the honors if you'd like
Is your school Northeastern U by any chance?
Yeah go huskies haha
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