Can someone review my interview answers for 10 min phone screening?

Hello, so I got the following:
I’m an accounting student at (extreme non-target). I graduate May 2025 with a Master’s Degree in Accounting. I will start that in August. I’ve worked as an accounting assistant at a regional corporation here in the south, in the industry, where I developed my professional communication skills and gained exposure to working with large sets of data in excel.  In this job, what appealed to me was month end tasks where I worked on large excel files with a lot of data, especially when something out of usual happened in the period and I had to research that under a relatively short time. That is what interested me the most and that is what pushed me into FDD out of all service lines, in addition to some other directional indicators. 

Why (this firm)?

(This firm's) practice in (x) serves the tech industry extensively, specifically the robotics industry. My brother works in that field and hearing about the constant acquisitions that are happening interests me a lot, especially when his company itself got acquired by another one. In addition, I’ve spoken to a lot of the X employees there at X in X and a lot of them were extremely helpful. I really enjoyed speaking with them and I could see myself working with them. I also know from them that the office is busy, and deal activity is high, which is unlike in a lot of other offices across the country in other firms right now.