Non-Target Rising Junior Resume Critique

MJK

First, OP, you're in a good place, experience-wise. Also this is a pretty good resume. Obviously we're going to be pretty harsh here though. Onto the review.

-I disagree with removing the Oxford--I went to a non-target and my experience abroad was a nice complement to my resume. It also helps explain the lack of internship last summer. I don't really know why it looks "desperate" since it's a legitimate experience and it's not like you wax poetic about it.

-I agree with matayo about monte carlo

-agree with matayo about most of the interests. What helps here is going more in depth with a few of the interests rather than simply listing them. What do you do with real estate? Do you flip it? Motorsports is fine, but do you race often? As (nearly) always with a finance resume, it's better to be more detailed and have fewer items

-I'd be wary of putting excel as a skill for the same reason as the monte carlo. It's fine if you're actually very competent but I've heard of people getting hit on that (although always secondhand) Also, be sure to know MPT extremely well for the same reason

-Volunteering on one off events isn't super relevant. If you are passionate about volunteering for some cause it can round out the resume, but it reads more like you were fulfilling service requirements

-Remove the objective statement.

Oxford will stay, it has been a good discussion point in my interviews thus far. And it shows I wasn't twiddling my thumbs at home last summer.

I am confident in my ability to discuss MPT and its applications. Monte Carlo, not so much, so I will remove it.

I'll narrow down the interests.

Removed volunteer and membership lines, they are redundant.

It seems it's not industry standard to include an objective statement, so I will remove it. With the new found space, I included my fraternity exec board board position. Better than white space, but still not cluttered.

Updated resume posted.