Aspiring IBD Senior from Non-Target Seeking Resume Criticism
http://www.razume.com/documents/16368
Hi everyone,
I am currently a rising senior at a non-target looking to get into investment banking. I understand I have a mediocre GPA, so I have really been networking hard. I would really appreciate it if I could get some constructive criticism on my resume in preparation for FT recruiting.
Thanks in advance
Where did you get this resume template from, just wondering?
Change your title on the RE thing from associate. You're not an associate in the banking sense of the world, change it to analyst or something else.
Too much text.
Eliminate your older and less relevant experience. Remember interviewers will not read the text under each position unless it is concise and measurable, or unless that particular position stands out as exotic or extraordinary. Your content is neither.
The resume looks too text dense. By eliminating older positions you will highlight more relevant and important ones, and by eliminating less effective text from those newer and more relevant positions, you make the remaining text and numbers more meaningful.
In my opinion, your resume should be a great sales blueprint for you as an employee. And in sales, simpler is better.
How did you work three jobs at once, curiously? Moreover, at 20, you were a "finance manager" at a hotel? I'm not saying you're lying, but your resume definitely will raise some eyebrows. If all this is true, perhaps you should temper down your experience to something that sounds more realistic, so you won't get dinged before the interview.
By the way, fix the grammar on the first bullet of the hotel job.
Taking a quick look:
Your format looks good - it's the format I recommend on my site - http://www.bankonbanking.com/resume-revisions/
I would combine the activities and skills sections unless you are planning to expand on some of your activities in greater detail.
I would remove the cumulative GPA and just leave the major GPA since the cumulative is off the 3.3 mark.
Take off Dean's List unless you've got at least one or two other honors
Increase the font size of your name
All verbs should be in past tense
For your 1st experience, keep the bullet points that have impact or that would be essential to IB. For example, did anything come of the due diligence? If not, it doesn't need to be there - alternatively, you can combine two of the bullets - due diligence and sourced, for example
For your 2nd experience - you don't need all of the sub and sub sub bullet points. Remove "Selected..." You've only got 1 bullet before it and 2 within it. Just have 3 primary bullets and highlight what you did and for what deal in 1 primary bullet for each of your 2 deals. Right now it's way too cluttered
The Frat stuff should go in Activities or a Leadership section along with perhaps your Treasurer position (and expand on it). Then move your smaller activities and volunteer work that you don't want to expand on below in a Skills and Activities section or something like that.
Additionally, your dates for your 3 most recent internships seems a bit off - all at the same time. The titles for your Hotel and P/E position also sound a bit off - you weren't even a Summer Associate or intern - you are a FT associate? Just sounds a bit off.
Frat is not work experience. I'm not sure if Jeopardy! is for real but if so I would say "we don't want to keep you from being home at 4pm every day".
Hi everyone,
Really appreciated the criticism... I went ahead and made the appropriate revisions here: http://www.razume.com/documents/16373
To address some of the overlapping experience, During the day, I worked 4x/week at the boutique and 1x/week at the BB PWM. I was then able to work on the RE start-up during nights and weekends.
I was briefly a manager for the hotel experience, and I do have documented proof for it. However, I do agree with everyone that it is a bit much so I toned it down
@ Cartwright - I test my knowledge with http://www.j-archive.com/ during downtime at work
Thanks again.
+1 for using Helvetica, but you may want to consider sticking with Times New Roman. Serif typefaces are easier to read on paper.
granted im still in college so this is more of a question then anything, by taking off his/her cumulative GPA I would consider this very deceptive and if I was reading through resumes I would be very cautious for someone who did not include their REAL gpa. just curious..
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