Burn it All to Hell
Looking for any critiques and suggestions to improve my resume here, whether its formatting, wording, or just any omissions that should be made.
Be as ruthless as you please, but the constructive criticism will be the most helpful.
Thanks.
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I'm going to be constructive but first you need to understand that there is very little that you can salvage from your current resume and that if you were to use this version, no one will look at it. I don't just mean a bank, but pretty much anyone.
I can't do too much until you provide more information. What type of position are you looking to apply to?
First, use a template. The colors are cool and all but it's disorganized and extremely hard to read.
You might try using this one, http://www.wallstreetoasis.com/forums/investment-banking-resume-template, if your school doesn't have one that you like.
Ditch the objectives part, I've never understood why people put those in. Obviously you're trying to get an internship or else you wouldn't be sending out your resume.
Having a job is definitely a good thing, however you're going to have a hard time relating it to finance. It's important that you try to display that you're hard working/have anything transferable in the area below the name of the job.
Example - "Optimize inventory and floor space to maximize sales" That's not too bad actually but it needs more.
Try "Used (something) to optimize inventory and floor space to increase sales by (xxx) percent" Then you'll need at least three lines for each job. Maybe only two for older/less transferable jobs.
I'll provide more insight after your next iteration.
re: Objectives - they can serve a purpose later in your career. For instance, I work a high-travel job and am open to significant travel or weekly commuting but am not open to relocating. This clarifies that while I am applying to a niche practice with the job req. posted in NYC, I will not be relocating from my city where they also have an office. If there is a possibility for the job to move to my city (also a major market) they will call. If not, my resume will end up in the bin and we don't waste each other's time. Of course, I sneak it in after my elevator pitch summing up my areas of expertise - looks a bit more graceful that way.
They are also helpful if you are looking to return to something you did previously. That way the reader knows that applying to a role similar to what you had two jobs ago is deliberate and not a sign of desperation.
That said, you look like a douche canoe if you have "Objectives" on there early in your career or it does not convey any valuable information.
I had to close it first before I could open it again. That shit hurt my eyes like no other.
Find a template on this website and format all your information onto that
Delete "Objective"
What did you do specifically in school? Clubs/activities?
Delete all bullshit phrases like "Strong multitasking skills for efficient customer service"
What from your experiences demonstrates leadership, initiative, process improvements, financial skills, etc? You have a section at the bottom but you need to expand on that and go into more detail.
http://www.wallstreetoasis.com/files/oasisresume.pdf
This one's better
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