critique this non-target senior resume (applying FT to ER, AM, CF, and MSF)

"Created and presented interactive lessons to teach members about investing, company analysis, and how the equity and debt markets function, using PowerPoint "

I think you can change this bullet that takes 2 lines whilst it could take 1. When you make a list each element needs to be similar (e.g., verb, noun, etc). So you could write instead: - Taught members about investment techniques, company analyses and the functioning of equity and debt markets, using Powerpoint or: - Created and presented interactive teaching sessions about investing, analysing companies and understanding the functioning of equity and debt markets, using PowerPoint

Or something similar. I think it is more correct. Also, I don't think it is really useful to precise that you used Powerpoint, according to me it doesn't really add value.

"Manage a personal stock portfolio that focuses on intermediate-term income and growth" I would personally not put a verb for this line, and write instead: "Management of a personal stock portfolio (...)"

"Play electric guitar, drums, flag football (intramural captain Fall 2013 and 2014), poker, fantasy sports" Same critique as before, the list needs to have similar elements. You could write: Interests: Electric guitar, drums, flag football (intramural captain Fall 2013 and 2014), poker, fantasy sports