IBD SA resume critique - SBs REWARDS FOR HELP
http://www.razume.com/documents/28023
I'm applying for IBD summer analyst programs this summer in London. I'm a 2nd year econ university student from a smallish european country.
I welcome all critique. Don't be afraid to mention very minor things or make harsh comments (as long as they're relevant). NB: I wanted to avoid blacking too many names out (so general impression isn't ruined), so many names have been changed to generics.
Specific questions/issues: - Is my name in too big a font size? (current size: 18 times new roman) - Have I listed too many courses/is my partitioning of courses into completed and current OK? - Is "student worker" a good word to use? I worked 15-40 hours a week at the jobs between high school and university and did work similar to what college interns would do. - Does this sentence sound stupid/vague: "Assisted a client considering a corporate acquisition by projecting the company’s future P&Ls" ? The projection was done in a very amateurish way, which I want to reflect in the wording.
1 SB will be given to non-troll/non-retarded comments. 1 additional SB will be given to comments, that include constructive opinions regarding my questions
I've ordered SBs, though haven't received them yet. I promise to award commentators as soon as the order comes through :)
Thanks!
Yes, I think your name is too big and it looks awkward. Is the relevant coursework section really necessary? I would take that out completely, it looks pointless in my opinion. Make your bullets more specific, elaborate, and most importantly QUANTIFY. "Part-time" is not necessary.
Get rid of the "current coursework" - just put everything under relevant coursework. And yes to the person above - it does matter. I got asked about my courses before. You should keep it to 2 lines, though (right now it's 3).
General formatting note - your location (city, country) should be on the right side. Also, your bullets points aren't quantified enough. Include more numbers - right now all I see is a wall of text.
Ugh my replies keep getting blocked by WSO spam filter, so I'm trying alternative wording:
Coursework: I don't have much to replace it with, perhaps a job as telemarketer (part-time) I had 4 years ago.
"Part-time analyst": My official job description is part-time analyst. I don't mind removing part-time, I'm just afraid it'll cause confusion as to how I can be an analyst at a PE firm and university student at the same time. I work there 15-20 hrs/week.
Location right/left: Thanks, I'll change it to the left side. Reason I changed it, was that I thought writing the same "City, Country" four times in a row looked sorta stupid.
Quantify/elaboration of bullet points: Again thanks, I'll try. Would it be possible for you guys to give an example of a quantification? Would it be an improvement to write "Analyzed track record of a €2B US buyout fund and 0,8€B EU venture capital fund. Analysis included comp analysis by vintage year/strategy/geographic focus and critical assessment of valuation of unrealized investments" instead of "Performed analyses on the track record of potential investment opportunities"? Ignore wording (just to get an idea), but is it that direction (much more specifics) I should head in?
SIMPLIFY the headers of the sections. way to long and just unattract from the main content.
simplify languages, just put ability and language, they dont care about reasons etc.
if you are elementary in sql, take it off, why have them question you on a skill if you aren't prepared? and then take out proficient and just have them listed
an interest in macroeconomics? that makes you sound boring as hell, interests are used to differentiate your personality on paper
student worker is fine, agreed on coursework changes, and yes name is to big
thats it for now.
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