Non-target resume critique! SA 2015. TY

I will give SB to anyone giving constructive criticism! Thanks

1. “International student scholarship” – Capitalize ‘student’ and ‘scholarship’
2. Switch the order of “Intermediate Accounting” & “Financial Statement Analysis’ to keep everything in alphabetical order left to right
3. You have quite a lot of white space towards the bottom, so I think you can afford to increase your font a bit. (It’d be a little easier on the eyes too!)
4. I would revise your 2nd bullet under the Non Profit organization internship to: “Managed project data, training programs, and budgets for Nonprofit organization’s database”
5. The 2nd bullet under your Mining Internship – can you quantify (%) how much you expedited to the process by? Always try to quantify your results where appropriate.
6. University Donations Office – same thing as #4. Use numbers in place of words so for example: (Raised over $5,000 in financial support from alumni)
7. No need to put down the Excel or Powerpoint skills. Those should be a given
8. Interests – capitalize each individual list item! Oh and you should check out my resume too, because when I first opened yours, our first two internship experience titles almost looked identical to me, haha.

Hope this helped!

-TGP

Delete commas before "and". For example, "Capital IQ, and Bloomberg" should be "Capital IQ and Bloomberg". In addition, under Interests you need to add "and" before volunteering/student mentoring. Lastly, in English numbers under 10 should be written out such as "Lead a team of 4",should be "Lead a team of four".

Nonprofit - second bullet sounds weird. If I'm interpreting it right, then maybe ", such as" will be a better fit in place of "like"

Bullet 3 of CFA Challenge, don't use "and then", maybe use "; moved on to present in front of a panel of CFA judges"

Investment club bullet 1 - did anything result from it?

Otherwise it looks solid. You can consider making your name bigger and bold so it looks more pronounced. Your judgment.

Hello Simeo,

I will give you a few suggestions, but the very best advice as a former writer of a major newspaper is to viciously hunt for your mistakes. A good rule of thumb is to find at least 10 typos or grammatical errors after the third or final draft of any document. Since this is your resume, I would say 20 typos. We all want our documents to be prefect so there is a mental challenge of finding mistakes when it is easier to believe that the document is fine. With that said, I would edit:

1. 2nd line under Summer Analyst: delete comma after "transactions" and before "and"
2. For your Accounting Internship did you translate documents "from" Spanish to English?

Regarding Content: 1. For your investment club state the type of industry research you conducted.
2. For the mining company internship, can you quantify the cost savings?
3. What type of student mentoring did you do? If you tutored anyone, I would say so.