Hey all,
Look for resume critique. Especially in a way to add some more numbers / finance oriented.
Feedback is appreciated.
And for some reason my skills line item got bumped to a second page when I uploaded, not sure why because original document is one page.
Thanks,
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what are you talking about?
Why is your resume 2 pages?
Also, what's with the gray boxes?
As stated in the original post, my original document is one page, for some reason after I uploaded it to razume, it became two. Regular doc is one.
Going to reformat, however more concerned with content at this point
Taking a quick look:
Some positives: You've got strong experience and an interesting background overall. That said, you do need to make some changes:
Increase the font size of your name, remove the space between your name and your contact info, and remove the gray highlighting behind the text on your section titles (although this could be some sort of a glitch - not your actual resume)
Add a space line between each experience - between Korn ending and Microsoft beginning, for example - to make room for that, you can remove "Xtreme Trips", condense your frat stuff into one line in your last section and eliminate/condense at least a few bullet points from your experiences (for example, your "Awarded..." bullet point for BofA)
Align your "Anticipated December 2009" graduation date to the right and move your GPAs over to the left and use a bullet point - I would consider removing your major GPA since it is just barely above your cumulative - but since it is a rounded tenth above, you can leave it if you'd like.
Change your Skills title to Skills and Hobbies or something like that to reduce the content in your "Other Experience" section and free up some more space.
For the bullet points of the most recent experience, they need to be cleaned up - try to focus on not just what you did, but what it actual meant to the team. For example, the 3rd bullet point sounds good, but what did it actually do for the team - was it utilized, or just a training exercise for fun. The 2nd bullet point is a bit confusing - you "Exposed..." what does that really mean - and what did you do in employee calls - if nothing great, then just remove it.
For Microsoft - you need to do the same as with the previous experience - clean up the bullet points a bit and try to focus on results where you can - additionally, any financial analysis you may have performed for any of your experiences should be detailed
For BofA - you can remove the "Trained in" bullet points and move that to a "Technical Skills" bullet point in your Skills and Hobbies section - show the skills learned and put BofA training program of something like that down as well.
Let me know if you have any questions and good luck.
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