first bullet under "Swedish Bank", get rid of "Have" in the "Have conducted"; just start it "Conducted ...."
there are a lot of grammatical mistakes. before I waste time blowing those up, are you concerned only with content? Or do you want someone to critique wording as well?
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first bullet under "Swedish Bank", get rid of "Have" in the "Have conducted"; just start it "Conducted ...."
there are a lot of grammatical mistakes. before I waste time blowing those up, are you concerned only with content? Or do you want someone to critique wording as well?
Hi, thanks for replying. Was in a bit of rush to post this, I am mostly concerned with content.
I honestly would get rid of high school. Once you have hit college, it basically means nothing.
take out high school, expand alot more on your summer analyst role and take out some of those non-relevant college team/captain stuff
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Another bullet suffers from the same passive tense as I pointed out before:
"Have organized...."
Just do "Organized....."
Also, at the top change "Maths" to "Math".
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