Veteran Resume Advice Please

Good day mates. I'm a transitioning service member and looking to break into asset management. The long story short is that I have worked with a few organizations like BIWS to work my military experience into a resume that matches my civilian counterparts and isn't the typical "I shot guns and made things go boom" army stuff that doesn't really appeal to employers (unless they are awesome). The thing is that I have yet gotten honest feedback on my resume from someone who is actually in or has experience with the industry.

Like everyone else who is trying to break into this amazing field, it is something I'm passionate about based on my financial experience with the military. That being said, if you, yes you reading this in front of your computer when you should be working, could peek at my resume and give me some honest feedback for better or worse, I would greatly appreciate it. Hit me with the good stuff, pull no punches and don't sugar coat anything because for all you know I'm diabetic and that would be a hate crime. I'm not but you get the idea.

Thank you in advance for your time, have a wonderful day and Go Blue!