CV & CoverLetter - S&T Citi, Internship - No mercy please !

Hello there fellow monkeys,

I am about to apply for a summer internship in S&T at Citi, London. Here are my attempted CV and Cover Letter. I would appreciate your criticism and suggestions on how to improve them to a more competitive level.

Thanks in advance!

 

CV good, cover letter not so good. I don't really understand why all of your sentences start with a verb, it makes for strange reading. some clumsy grammar especially in second paragraph. also perhaps more emphasis on markets is needed, ideally a particular desk (choose this wisely!). finally a company cannot be a mentor, a mentor is a person within a company (or just a person).

 

Thanks darety! yes, the cover letter needs a lot of improvement and will try to rethink it asap. Would focus on my understanding/passion for markets as you said, and will try to tailor it for the Equities desk. However, do you think its advisable to include a firm preference in the cover letter? Wouldn't it narrow my chances of getting the job at all if, let's say, equities has already been proffered by more competitive applicants? In the CV,"I" is for "international".... I mistakenly thought that I cured it of typos...

 

stating a preference won't hurt you, just make it clear it's a preference not a requirement. i work in AM and I said I wanted to work in high yield corporate debt on my cover letter and interviews - I got an offer for global equities!

 

stating a preference won't hurt you, just make it clear it's a preference not a requirement. i work in AM and I said I wanted to work in high yield corporate debt on my cover letter and interviews - I got an offer for global equities!

 

I didn't read any of this, but why are you just applying to Citi?

Jack: They’re all former investment bankers who were laid off from that economic crisis that Nancy Pelosi caused. They have zero real world skills, but God they work hard. -30 Rock
 
Best Response

Cover Letter: The first big paragraph is extremely weird, I would really take it down a notch, I know you are trying to show passion but trying to use passionate sentences in the CL is not the way to do that. THe way to do that is through objective things you have done and skills you have. Also stay away from saying things like you adding value, you wont be adding value for a while, and even if you are the tits, its a bit annoying reading a CL where a 20 yo kid is saying to an experienced professional how he can add value.

CV: -WHats "I finance"? -Your dates are messed up, not consistent at all -I die a little bit inside every time i see current affairs as an interest -Overall I like how you focus your bullets, reads like you actually did things instaed of participated at first glance, if i had to nitpick, on the first bullet take away "clear" from the ppt description, not really something to brag about that your PPT's are "clear", just a bit weird.

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