[Help!] Cover letter help for summer internship in HongKong

Hi everyone

I know that I can get some good and specific advice from this forum, cause I have a dream to enter the finance industry for a long time, and now I am a grad student in Dartmouth, my undergrad college is the best (no "one of") in China, majored in EE, but I barely have any persuasive related internship experience in the last 4 years(I have regret about that now), the only opportunity for me is to have a internship in a large investment bank, Hong Kong may be an easier choice but it is also fiercely competitive.

So the cover letter attached below is a complement to resume, which basically states the past experience of mine, including a summer internship in a middle-sized software company, some lab work in Tsinghua, also a summer short internship in which I lead a 10-people group to a Top 500 corp. to study (or apprenticeship). So I decided the only way I can write in the cover letter is to state the process I came to know the financial industry and how passionate (perhaps you cannot sense that from the cover letter I wrote due to my limited awareness of the industry) I am about the investment banking (Trading was also one of my favorite divisions).

try to state my advantage in a modest way, my strength is also obvious: smart(undoubtedly I am confident that I am among one of the smartest groups in China), strong analytical skill(solid engineering background, I am confident but don't know how to demonstrate it from the first glance of the resume or cover letter), sensitive to information( I always keep up with the current event in Asia and also global news), good communication skill, and dual fluency in Chinese and English, while I can also speak Cantonese but somehow I doubt if it is preferred, passion(I changed my major from EE to finance simply because I always have a dream to be a financier and keep studying EE make me sick.), and pursue of the best.

About the Career path:

my first choice of career path would be working in a IBD(M&A is exciting) or Trading(get to know the global market to cultivate my international vision), then I may pursue a MBA after 3 or 4 years. I know that being a intern they don't require you to be expertise in financial knowledge, but certainly I know that my experience is not the best of all the candidate, maybe even weak in some aspects. I just want to hear some advice about my COVER LETTER, and also your path when you choose finance as your career, how would I impress the reader of my cover letter and offer me an interview?

THANK YOU VERY MUCH FOR YOUR ADVICE TO A GUY THAT YOU DON'T EVEN KNOW!

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To whom it may concern:

After learning about the information of the summer analyst program at Morgan Stanley in Hong Kong, I feel that I am suitable and qualified for this job, based on my skills, experiences and passion for the Investment Banking industry and especially Morgan Stanley.
Being highly sensitive to numbers and current events, I graduated with considerable academic performance from the Department of Electronic Engineering in Tsinghua University, where I learned the art of quantitative analysis and critical thinking from extensive mathematical and engineering practice. I also showed leadership potential by successfully organizing a 10 people internship trip during the summer vacation. Besides, by grasping the essence of communication and teamwork, I performed excellent and cooperated with other partners to design a 32-bit CPU. 4 years in Tsinghua granted me a solid foundation, a sense of responsibility and most importantly, confidence, for my future career development.
However, working in financial related industry has long been the dream of mine, so I shifted my major to Engineering Management in order to seek more opportunities. After several talking to the CCC members about the career development, I participated in your info session on campus, simultaneously I persisted to collect every possible information about financial industry. During these processes I surprisingly felt a sound of excitement resonating deep in my heart, which has vanished for quite a long time. The experience in the MEM program helped me realize it is finance that I really want to pursue.
Morgan Stanley is one of the leading financial institutions in the world with well-established reputation. As a native Mandarin speaker and a keen analyzer of Asia, I am confident to work intensively to contribute my wisdom and unique perspective to your group, while the professional insight in financial industry and international vision are what I expect for return.
Thank you for your interest and I will make myself available at your convenience if you offer me an interview. Looking forward to hearing from you.

Sincerely