Is my Cold Messaging on Linkedin to MD/VP's bad? It's for SA26 should i include it in the message? Please give me your opinions and how i can work towards enhancing it. (success rate it 0%)
Hello First Name,
I really appreciate you connecting! I’ve long admired the environment at ... — one that values collaboration and growth — and your career stands out as one I truly look up to.
I’ll be joining .... next year and am working on building my profile for future opportunities in investment banking. If you’re open to a quick call or even willing to share your corporate email, I’d really appreciate any advice you could offer on early career development.
Best regards,
Yes it is (in my opinion - very) bad
how come? and most importantly, where to fix? could you please provide a sample?
this is shit
can yall actually tell me how to improve instead of bashing it?
there really isn’t any way to improve linkedin messaging cause in general it’s just something you don’t do. use apollo ai to find their email and email them instead
Learn to use apollo io
This is horrible
Imagine you were the one receiving this message—can you even get through the first paragraph without making an “ugh” face?
can you please help? What should i change, could you give me some insights or provide a format of what you think would get them to answer? please i'm just so lost
Since nobody is giving you more detail here's some line edits:
TLDR you should probably scrap the entire thing, there's a million things on this site that will tell you what to do but please don't send this
alr thx so much man, alr sent this a few times but it's fine will definitely pay attention to those points in the future. Also, would you recommend reaching out to MD/VPs or analysts/associates?
Analyst/associate for sure. way way wayyyy more likely to help and respond. They will know who runs recruiting too
I would also send to their work email. LinkedIn is just a bit lazy tbh, I never respond to linkedin messages but I respond to as many work emails as I can.
Important: Do not send on a weekend. Schedule them to go out Mon/Tues if you want, but I will rage delete any weekend networking emails
Hi First Name,
Thanks for connecting — I’m currently wrapping up my first year of undergrad and will be joining ... London campus next year. I’ve been exploring opportunities in investment banking and came across your profile while looking into [insert group name, like M&A or Leveraged Finance] at Morgan Stanley.
Would be great to hear a bit about your experience if you’re open to it — even a quick chat or a few pointers would mean a lot.
Best,
Is that better?
way better
This is way too long and is a bunch of filler crap. Throw something specific in there to grab their attention and keep it concise.
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