How do I make a customized line in cold email?

My cold email is:

Subject Line: XXX university student seeking career information or XXX university student reaching out (for alumni)

Body: Hello Mr/Ms,

My name is XXX and I am a [grade level] majoring in Finance at the XXX university. I am interested to learn more about investment banking and [Firm Name] in particular. Would you have some time next week for a quick call? I would appreciate the chance to learn about your experiences and any advice you could give me.

Sincerely, My name

I was wondering how I should add a common element or an additional line to get someone more interested. I had solid success with this email but am not sure if another sentence is needed. Any help is appreciated.

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