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-Take off the start up experience. In the best case it will be looked at positively as leadership experience, but it will most likely be held against you because it makes you look like you don't know what you want. Tech--in terms of recruitment--is a direct competitor of finance.

-Expand on the modeling you did in the student investment club.

-Capitalize the word "office". If you say that you're strong, expect to be grilled on Excel work.

-Include more interests.

-More of a stylistic thing, but don't repeat words twice under the same experience when it isn't necessary, like you did with the adjective "outstanding".

Put some numbers on the companies you founded/co-founded such as revenue, sales, growth. Even if we're talking very low figure revenue my opinion is that it's still better to supply this information as it makes your experience of running a company much more concrete and "real".

Reading a resume where the candidate has included experience of founding a company named X and doing Y doesn't really tell me anything. For all I know this could be a company which never had any activity of any kind. If you include information showing the company sales grew X % during your time as Lead of Sales that will impress me even if we're only talking $10 000 or even lower sales figures.

Round up your GPA to 3.6

• Some dates are in italic, some are not. Fix it.
• If you led sales team, write down how much people were in the team (if there we more than 1, at least)
• Must be 1 page only.

I like that you don't even change the margins so that everything fits on 1 page but expect people to give you helpful advice. Why not go through your resume and at least fix the formatting and put some effort into the resume before asking for the help of people on WSO. Attitudes like yours just annoy me.

josecuervoResearched prospective companies to generate leads for sales team

Would read better if "Research prospective companies and generated XX leads for sales team[/quote]

You need to format properly. Once you format and take everyone else's recommendations above into consideration, I will help you with the wording.

1. Space after May 2014 and format the dash
2. Space after June 2012
3. Space after May 2013 and format the dash
4. Delete the extra space before "business model"
5. Limit the resume to one page
6. Re-order your experience starting from the most recent

I'm watching the Heat game so I could've missed a few formatting issues that weren't already mentioned above. As always, I will double-check your formatting once you make the necessary changes. Best of luck.

I have no idea whether you made the exact changes or not since the updated version isn't posted.

Here's the thing; I'm all about helping others, but you need to do your part. There are a ton of simple errors in this resume. You need to review (which includes rewording your bullet points and formatting) your resume at least three times before asking for help is acceptable. I don't want to be douche, but you'll learn more by trying to do as much as you can before asking for help.

"Analyzed customers credit history and decided with a team of credit analysts if they were eligible for approval" doesn't sound right.

Maybe something like "Analyzed customer credit history and collaborated with a team of credit analysts to determine lease eligibility"

Also, there has to be some way you can spin some finance experience out of starting your own company. Something simple like projecting revenue or determining price points would make a nice addition and give you some way to spin that in an interview