Non-Target Junior HARSH CRITIQUE WANTED
Non-Target junior (small, top 50 liberal arts school) looking to get into ER or investment management at a BB or equity research firm in NYC this summer.
Please be as mean as possible!
Thanks in advance
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Hi - I am a student so I don't have much to offer.
One thing I noticed though, was that the dates for "college investment group" have an apostrophe facing a different way than the other dates you have listed.
Just my 2 cents' worth:
Your relevant course work list is very long and some of them e.g. Sociology don't seem relevant.
Your Experience section should focus on what you contributed so I'm not sure how relevant "Gained extensive knowledge of municipal bond official statements and regulatory filings" is. Maybe you could rephrase that in terms of your contributions.
I'd scrap the "relevant coursework" section altogether.
There are 300,000 other kids who took the same classes, and it's a waste of space.
Thanks.. I completely understand what you are saying. Anything else? What about the wording? Should I keep all four experiences? What about the skills, activities, and interests at the bottom?
-Write out the full year, ie: 2012 not '12 and spell out "Present" instead of "Pres" -GPA should read 3.20 / 4.00 or whatever it rounds up to for two decimal places -Delete every period you have in your resume -I'd use the standard bullet points instead of those arrows -For interests, I would just write "Investing, Traveling, Scuba Diving, College Football (D2/3 Quarterback)"...no sentences -Italicize the dates -Italicize and unbold the position titles -EVERYTHING should be left aligned, including the bullets -Try to quantify the bullet points a bit more -A "LEADERSHIP & ACTIVITIES" label should separate the work experience and extra curricular/fraternity positions
Do all these changes, and if you want, PM me the revised copy and I can go over it again for you. Overall, it's pretty solid.
Thank you for the advice, I will definitely consider what you said. I appreciate the help. I'll change it tonight and private message it to you.
Anyone else? Was I able to use my previous work experience in data analytics and muni bond analysis to show quantitative ability for ER? How are my Finance Team and Investment Group sections?
Can wallstreetoasis grade my resume?
Thanks in advanced.
anyone else?
sending it out today, does anyone else have any recommendations? can @wallstreetoasis.com please review my resume?
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