Please Critique my Resume - Analyst role at a BB

I'll address your points first:

1) No, you don't need finance as an interest - you're in the investment club. Take investing off of interests, as it's redundant, and you don't actually invest on your own. They might even ask you about your current positions if you leave it on, in which case you might be in trouble.

2) You can probably get away with singing. Betting is shaky. Rapping is a no-go.

3) Yes.

Now, my points:

a) You need to focus more on your work experience. Find material to cut elsewhere. That might include getting secondary school down to one bullet line, moving your fraternity to "Interests" (and re-titling that line "Interests and Activities"), and consolidating "Leadership & Activities" with "Work Experience" as "Work and Leadership Experience." I think that this approach is appropriate because your experience with the investment club is work-related, and your Model UN and IM Sports experiences are leadership-related. With all of the space now available, drill deeper into your equity research internship, your management internship, and your investment club experience. Focus on the ER internship.

b) Take off MS Office Suite - everyone is proficient in this. "Bloomberg Terminal" is awkward, go with just "Bloomberg."

c) Switch the order of Mandarin and Spanish (i.e., Spanish first).

d) Don't qualify the size of your merit scholarship. Just say "Merit Scholarship."

e) Get your address onto one line, and just use your school address (will free up more space).

General note: Reexamine all of your experience bullets, and emphasize actions that you took. Think about how you can describe something in a way that frames it as a proactive move, not a reactive completion of a task. Obviously there are cases that are a bit of a stretch in this respect, so you'll have to do what you can. This is a good list of past-tense action verbs you can start from: http://www.bc.edu/offices/careers//skills/resumes/verbs.html

Good luck.