Tear my resume to shreds

Hey folks,

I'm looking for feedback on my resume, constructive or not. For context, looking to recruit out of my SA this June at an EB coverage group either to PE or an M&A group. While I think it's in a decent spot, I have a few areas I'd like to highlight:

  • Am I repeating verbs too often? Feels like I use built and create a lot but replacing them with too many fancy verbs starts to sound a bit excessive
  • For my PE role, I copied the same format as my IB internship, is that the right call?
  • Is the resume too dense for a recruiter / HR? Technical points are likely great for an An/Aso to look through, but got some feedback that a recruiter might want shorter, one line bullets cause they take a 30 sec pass through the resume
  • Comprehension is huge, if anything is unclear or difficult to understand, please point it out. Spelling and grammar as well

Tear it to shreds, any comment no matter how small or how nitpicky is appreciated

Thanks guys!

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Diving straight into your concerns, let's address each point with insights drawn from the most helpful WSO content:

  1. Repetition of Verbs: It's crucial to vary your language to keep the resume engaging. However, the key is to use action verbs that accurately describe your achievements without sounding pretentious. If "built" and "create" are the verbs that most accurately describe your contributions, consider synonyms like "developed," "designed," "formulated," or "established" for variety. The goal is to convey your role and impact clearly and concisely.

  2. PE Role Format Similar to IB Internship: Consistency in formatting across different roles can help maintain a clean, professional appearance for your resume. However, ensure that the content under each role is tailored to highlight the most relevant skills and achievements for the positions you're targeting. For a PE role, emphasize analysis, due diligence, and valuation work. For an M&A group, focus on deal experience, client interaction, and transaction processes.

  3. Resume Density: The feedback you received about recruiters preferring shorter, one-line bullets is aligned with the general preference for concise and easily skimmable content. Aim to distill your achievements into impactful, one-line statements that capture your contributions and results. Technical details are important but balance them with readability. Remember, the goal is to pass the 30-second test where a recruiter can quickly grasp your qualifications and achievements.

  4. Comprehension, Spelling, and Grammar: Clarity is paramount. Avoid jargon that might not be universally understood, and ensure that your resume can be easily comprehended by someone outside of your immediate field. Proofread meticulously for spelling and grammar errors, as these can be immediate red flags for recruiters and indicate a lack of attention to detail.

Remember, every piece of your resume should serve the purpose of showcasing your skills, achievements, and potential value to the employer. Keep refining and seeking feedback, as the process of perfecting your resume is ongoing and iterative. Good luck with your applications!

Sources: Filtering resumes - what I looked for when screening 200+ resumes, ANSWERED: Most Common Resume Questions, Filtering resumes - what I looked for when screening 200+ resumes, Why Your Resume Sucked A**, CV Review - please rip my CV apart

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