You've definitely got a lot of work to do formatting wise. Reduce the font size, make th sections pop more and add a line underneath them, don't underline. Your education section is all over the place with GPAs off to the right (get rid of the /4.0), May 2010 has not occured yet, so throw in "anticipated" or "expected," use bullet points - example column bullet points side by side for major and cumulative GPA, then next line, major and honors, as your sole honor seems to be Dean's List (in other words, it's not a full line).
Clean up your sentences a bit - they are long and often beat around the bush. "Took initiative" - please change that - in fact, the entire sentence seems a bit confusing - did anything result from this. The last bullet of your 2nd position doesn't add value. Your last bullet of the 3rd position has an odd space in it. In general, you need to sell your experiences and trim your sentences.
If you want "attended investment seminars" in there, then you should list one or two instead of making the statement. There is no need for "following financial markets." If you held an office or are a leader in any of your clubs, you should talk more about that - when you reduce the font, cut a few sentences and clean up the others, you should have some free room. Sorry for the rant, but this should at least get you started.
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You've definitely got a lot of work to do formatting wise. Reduce the font size, make th sections pop more and add a line underneath them, don't underline. Your education section is all over the place with GPAs off to the right (get rid of the /4.0), May 2010 has not occured yet, so throw in "anticipated" or "expected," use bullet points - example column bullet points side by side for major and cumulative GPA, then next line, major and honors, as your sole honor seems to be Dean's List (in other words, it's not a full line).
Clean up your sentences a bit - they are long and often beat around the bush. "Took initiative" - please change that - in fact, the entire sentence seems a bit confusing - did anything result from this. The last bullet of your 2nd position doesn't add value. Your last bullet of the 3rd position has an odd space in it. In general, you need to sell your experiences and trim your sentences.
If you want "attended investment seminars" in there, then you should list one or two instead of making the statement. There is no need for "following financial markets." If you held an office or are a leader in any of your clubs, you should talk more about that - when you reduce the font, cut a few sentences and clean up the others, you should have some free room. Sorry for the rant, but this should at least get you started.
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