Value/Fundamental Hedge Fund Internship Resume - Please Critique WSO!
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Are you applying to the US or Australia? Because I am having a laugh over your favorite books; "native in English"; "competitive eSports"; and your 6 months investment returns.
No idea if this stuff is standard in Australia -- I know it's a former prison colony where everyone has a funny accent -- but this shit would not fly in the US, and probably not the UK. And despite your assertion, I have a hard time believing a 2-page CV is okay for people with a half-page worth of real accomplishments.
Applying within Australia.
I've spoken with some analysts in funds and some say including favourite books can be somewhat of a differentiator in showing that I do have a passion for value investing.. most undergrads that I know haven't read or even know about Greenblat's of the sort.
I didn't think "native in English" seemed odd, this is a template from M&I and using advice from WSO - I do have an ethnic-sounding name so it would clarify that English is my first and only language.
I understand "competitive eSports" is laughable - and I fully understand ... although I have travelled around Australia and have had the opportunity to travel to LA. I put up a thread on WSO a couple weeks ago and 80-90% of the consensus was to slap it on and own it. I am perfectly fine with removing this and substituting it with something more appropriate
I'll remove the 6 month investment returns. Thanks.
Bump .. updated it.
-It definitely needs to be 1-page. Related to this point, the bullets do not need a space between each one and some of your bullet points need to be more succinct. Don't write a novel about every task you did. Doing this, you should be able to save 7-8 lines easy.
-Cut the references at the bottom. That does not need to be included in the resume
-Cut at least one of the extracurriculars from high school (you dont need that much space on your high school). Debatable whether you need high school at all, but if its well-known or likely to bring up a connection then keep it.
-The whole section for extracurriculars (spelling error in the title by the way) just to list your basketball seems a bit odd to me. If you really want to highlight this, maybe just add it in under the Activities and Interests section under something like Athletics?
In general, it seems like you are just over-explaining everything. Part of a resume's goal is to get people to ask you about further experiences and start a conversation. You don't need to describe everything in such heavy detail, the key experiences to highlight are Education and Job Experience, the rest is just filler that you hope piques an interviewer's interest and helps you connect with them. Nobody gives a crap about what position you played, where you played, in what years etc. If they do, they will ask you about it by simply seeing XYZ basketball.
Let me know if you have further questions
Want to add the caveat that I am only speaking to experience in resumes for the US/Europe, if something I said is completely normal in Australia, then by all means ignore it (although I doubt this is the case, should be pretty standard everywhere)
Good advice... I'd second all this (coming from an Aussie)
Thanks for the advice.
I updated the resume with to be much more condensed and compact.. didn't realise how much I waffled on.
-See now you have a bit more space to work with. From here, you actually have some white space to fill in. I didn't realize how much it space you;d save with all the cuts. You could probably add back the HS extracurriculars you cut if you feel they are important, as you want to fill out the page. Might have advised too much cutting.
-Volunteer experience/Leadership experience is always a nice way to fill out a resume when you are still struggling to fill a page and don't have any more relevant work experience
-I've personally never really seen this before, but you could possibly expand on your basketball with a small section titled Athletics or Athletic Experience (or Leadership Experience if you want to spin it that way).
-Also, noticed you seem to have name, then phone number and email. You should also have an address line there
Name Address E-mail - Phone (I use a bullet point to separate these) *Center all of these at the top as you have it. I personally think putting "Contact:" is overkill, but guess thats personal preference.
-I have my section named Skills, Activities & Interests.. I include a line for skills, which i've grouped in languages and computer skills (excel, etc.). You could do something similar to this to include your ability in the key programs (excel, word, ppt, any financial systems - bloomberg, factset, capiq, etc) but only if you are comfortable in them.
-Lastly, I would just work on tightening up the language on the bullets. I don't want to push my writing style on you, so i'll leave that up to you but try to avoid repeating words over and over again with the same bullet (client portfolio and ASX for example). An example I would change is something like this:
Utilized a combination of excel DCF and comparable analysis modeling techniques to assess and value large-cap ASX listed companies suitability for the fund’s value criteria.
Created financial models, including discounted cash flow and comparable companies analysis, to assess the suitability of various Australian equities for the fund within the firm's value criteria
I think doing all of this should get you to a solid, concise resume. Format looks good, although some people say the bullets should be aligned with the beginning of the other lines.
Don't want to seem like I'm crushing everything you've done. Pick and choose the suggestions you like, change wording, etc etc. At the end of the day, it should be your own style, as long as it highlights your experiences and abilities with proper formatting (1-page, clean, uniform)
Awesome thanks.
I'll put a volunteer/leadership section in later today, also, yeah I found that my wording/language does tend to waffle on quite a bit, thanks.
No problem man. Happy to help. Best of luck on the search
Bump.. would love to hear some more constructive criticism.
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