Harsh review for Investment banking resume
Hi Guys,
I am applying for an investment banking or private equity internship and i would like you to review my resume in order to start applying. Please review it harshly. Thanks in advance
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why did you put your secondary school info here? also, you don't have nearly enough write up for what you did during your work experience or internships
how old are you? 26-27? you might want to think about lateral moves from a bank 27 is getting there
lol, also how did you get 110% in secondary school
Oh God...
Contact information should be 2 lines, first your full address and the second being your phone and email. If your masters degrees are from the same university, combine them into one heading as your Education heading takes up way to much space (as such, cut out high school completely as the people reviewing wont care at all). Honors under schooling does not need to be in bullet form. You also have not listed any GPAs or grades so they will assume there are bad.
Cut the “Internships” heading and put that information under work experience, as having to two headings isn’t MECE . Also, make sure your dates and cities are flush against the right-side margin of the page.
NOW… onto the main problem lol. Your bullet points are extremely week. Firstly, avoid personal pronouns (I, we, my… ect) as that's a sure way to get your resume thrown out. Make sure everything is in past tense, and all bullet points start with an action word (Researched, Analyzed, Led, Managed, Operated… ect)
The vast majority of your bullet points are very vague and do not tell the reader what you ACCOMPLISHED. Your strongest bullet point was the first one under MERIS, but it’s still weak and you need to be more specific. How large was the team? How much money was involved? How many banks (name specific institutions)? Even this point, though, does not tell me how you ADDED VALUE to your work environment. This is key to do in resumes. Companies want to hire people that will add value to their company (obviously), so in your resume you need to show the reader that you have experience adding value to other companies in your previous jobs. …“Maintenance of Completion tools and mechanical parts.”… come on man, it doesn't even sounds like your trying to impress the reader. You worked at Nokia for almost a year, surely you can come up with more impressive bullet points than that! Also, cut out the “various student jobs” section; you have enough experience to expand on your more relevant work.
Cut “fluent in English”, cut “MS office”, as that is not a technical skill.
Start with this and don't repost until you get at least 10+ solid bullet points under your work experience.
Good luck!
thanks... So I should write more in the internships and work experience and remove the secondary education, btw i got the 110 because there are advanced subjects their grades are multiplied by 1.5 :D
yes, while combining internships and work experience into one heading. type into google "results orientated resume" or something like that to get more information on how to write those bullet points.
Don't use "I"...EVER Sure someone has mentioned but need more bullets for your roles - expand on most recent and maybe kill the ones that are >3 years ago Ambiguous capitalization after colon (Honors: full scholarship.....Honors: Awarded Category...) Alignment of dates on the right - push to the edge and make sure they all align vertically "Finance Intern in Credit rating" - capitalize the R......in general stop using capital letters when you dont need to and make them all consistent.
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