I need some suggestions for my resume

I went to a mediocre state school in Michigan. I have work experience, but it's completely unrelated to finance (I worked various jobs at a YMCA camp). The only thing I have going for me now is a handful of connections in Chicago and New York.

Here's my resume:

http://www.razume.com/documents/19352

I would like blunt, unadulterated, constructive feedback.

thanks

 

Well, I think the layout is fine. There just isn't much conent there. I am assuming you are a freshman or sophomore? Your education is listed as Jan 09 - Dec 10... change this to Jan 09-Present if you are still in attendance.

Under your activities section you listed finance tutor. Maybe you can bring this up to the work/leadership area and put a few bullet points.

 

Another small point, which may not even matter - I notice you used commas to separate items in the Training section but used semicolons under Activities and Interests. I would try to be consistent.

 
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Here's some "blunt, unadulterated, constructive feedback."

  1. You have way too much white space.
  2. You should have your graduation date listed rather than the length of time you've been at college.
  3. Your YMCA activity should be consolidated into one point on your resume.
  4. Most of your points are quite vague to be honest i.e. "arbitrated to alter group behavior." ???
  5. Excel, Powerpoint, and Word should be listed under Technical Skills not Training. Also, you probably shouldn't include them.
  6. For activities, you already mentioned YMCA in your experience section. Why do you have it twice?

Anyway, not to sound rude but this resume needs a lot of work. I would suggest 1) getting more/better work/ leadership experiences and 2) networking. You have time, you are only a sophomore, but there are A LOT of people ahead of the game.

Hope this helps.

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You need to change your user name on razume if you plan on submitting through the site. Did you actually graduate in 2 years? If so this is a help/hurt situation one it shows you are really dedicated but it also may lead to people thinking you are immature. So just list your graduation date

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You have no real work experience in finance or in a corporate setting. Moreover as heister pointed out you will seem very immature and the YMCA visual will come off that you are a little boy. I highly advise you move your tuoring into your work section. This will help you lose white space and will give you some credibility. List that first and fluff it up. Say that you tutored one on and one and ran small review groups which helped you learn how to communicate in a clear effective manner. And since you tutored in finance it will bring peoples attention to the fact that you are helping other learn finance (giving the impression that you know something)

 

try and get involved with a finance related club or a business fraternity. There are plenty of exec positions in those that are not too hard to get. That will help fill in all the white space.

 

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