Critique my Cold Email Format
Hey all, just wanted to see if anyone has any thoughts on my cold email format for alumni, as a non-target.
Hi Name, I hope this email finds you well.
My name is [your name] and I am currently a sophomore pursuing my BBA at College, interested in [area of interest] opportunities at [firm name]
I understand you are busy and may not have the time but I would value a brief phone call to discuss your experience at College and your role at Firm. I would be more than happy to accommodate your schedule.
I have attached my resume for more context on my background.
Best regards,
Name
Also, should I attach my resume, and should I include a line about my past experiences? I do have intern experience in corp. finc FP&A, so I'm hesitant about adding it as idk if it's relevant.
Instead of asking for opportunities which is more of an HR question, ask to hear about their experience at the firm in their role. Lastly, provide a list of times your available throughout the week already and at the end say I can adjust these times if they don’t work. This is important since it will give you a high likelihood the next email sent by them from yours is a time setup already preventing all the unnecessary back and forth
Always offer 3 time slots that work for you as separate bullet points
Write a one-liner about your interest or previous experience that has led you to pursue that person’s group
This is probably just how WSO formatted your post, but you should break out the whole message into different paragraphs rather than everything stacked together
Avoid using the word “but” or anything with a negative tone (e.g., unfortunately, however, etc). You can offer the time slots that work for you and say “I understand you are busy, SO I am happy to find another time…”
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