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  • "exposer"
  • certain things are capitalized and certain things aren't, kind of inconsistent
  • personally, i wouldn't use those "sub"-bullet points that you use
  • "analyzed gathered information and..." this is a runon/incorrect
  • "Overcame the difficulty of" sounds unnecessary or awkward to me
  • btw, you might've just typed yahoo as a placeholder, but if you have a school email address, write that instead of a personal one like yahoo.

also, you misspelled "First" at the top of the page ... just kidding

 

"Fluent in English"? It's assumed, so you don't need that.

And there's probably another title that does justice to your role with the Rugby Team that doesn't make me think of George Washington crossing the Delaware River.

"Better to remain silent and be thought a fool than to speak out and remove all doubt." --Abraham Lincoln
 
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Overall, I would go through this a few more times with a much greater attention to detail. Really think about each bullet point, what you want to accomplish with it, and the clearest, most concise way to communicate your point. As it stands, many bankers would immediately dismiss this resume without even reading it if you caught them on a bad day.

Coming from a non-target and speaking from experience, your resume needs to be perfect. Non-targets can't have overlooked grammatical or formatting errors on their resume... the margin of error is just too thin.

Some specific items just at first glance:

-Don't use yahoo email. -"Gained exposer..." -"Analyzed gathered"; also "Recommended" is capitalized on the same line. -"Generated and income..." -I'd reword the first rugby bullet. "Overcame the difficulty" is awkward. -I'd remove the bullet on raising two hundred dollars.
-Remove bullet on the benefit of club to school community; that is an opinion, not a fact. -Remove "Fluent in English." On a side note, if you are ESL, I would note that. -Capitalized the first item in the various lists (intersets, technical skills, etc.)

 

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