Big 4 hopeful, IB dreamer

Just in general... to everyone, not just you: Be SPECIFIC and QUANTIFY.

• The objective is pretty unnecessary for these jobs, and if you want to include it - be more specific. The only good part is "summer internship." Include the employer name and location of the office. Most importantly: if you are applying to Big 4 include your desired line of service (i.e. Tax, Audit, Advisory). This is usually specified on the online job posting, so it shouldn't be too hard to figure out which one to use. (Don't apply to multiple lines of services for one firm). Take out the "invaluable..." blah blah. I only included an objective when I was applying to out of state offices, because then you really need to emphasize that you want to work THERE not where you currently are.

• The Account Society description says "Daydreamed for an hour every week in the hopes that putting this on my resume will land me my dream job." Attending the meetings on a weekly basis is like the bare minimum to put that on your resume. You might as well put "paid my dues on time!" That's expected. Participate (if you can't be an officer, try volunteering to present on your work experience, signing people in, organizing/bringing in the food etc.). If you are involved in this society they should have you participating in some community service events as well. List those.

• Align the coursework (the bottom 2 lines should not be indented farther).

• On your Wealth Management experience, remove the part about how they had been dropped by the company. No one cares and it does not make the job sound more important. In fact I think it gives kind of a depressing feel to that sentence. That sentence can be split up. I think "analyzed" is stronger and it should be at the front of one of your bullets. "Analyzed fund performance and asset allocation using" [insert what type of program/data? Excel? VBA? SAP?]." Make another bullet for "Researched [insert something specific like SEC filings, financial statements, shareholder documentation]"

The "investigated" sentence is blah. Read that outloud. Make it more concise, and I think "Implemented" is stronger than investigated. It makes you sound powerful! "Implemented a revised media plan, including a new website and pamphlet, based on feasibility investigations" or something like that. Is there anyway to measure your results? Can you add that site visits increased 15% in the next [time period]? That would be nice.

• "Assisted" sentence again bothers me. I think that word always makes people sound unimportant. Start with the better word in there: "Contructed" and then so they don't ask how you assembled an entire building by yourself, show off your teamwork skills by ending with "in a team of 50 volunteers" or something. Quantify whenever possible.

I don't like the switching between past tense and present or whatever "maintain" is. Perhaps you can pick one tense, if only to be consistent for each experience listing.

• Team Rare Disease should be elaborated and you know its coming.... get rid of assisted! How did you raise $55,000? Did you knock on people's doors (balls + communication with random strangers = excellent skills)? Be specific by saying how you raised it. If your part is impressive and distinguishable from the others, maybe include that amount. Otherwise say "Raised $55,000 in a team of 10 by [insert method]." Did you help plan the strategy? Did you lead your team or any other members in any way? Did you recruit people for your team?! This bullet has great potential... I like the quantification! If the time period in which you raised $55k is impressive mention that!

• The bullet for global leadership actually makes it sound worse than it is ... because again, you are saying that you did the bare minimum! My suggestion is to add a certification section that includes this certificate, and says CPA eligible [insert month, year]. Also include any other little certs that people get over the course of their life (CPR? Safety (for your furniture job maybe)?).

I'm spent.