Remove relevant course work, these subjects look like core courses to your degree. "Quant subjects" is not descriptive. Low impact. I'd only add unique electives. Consider just putting "Candidate 2017" for your Uni. People only really care to know when you are expected to graduate (to consider you for FT) Remove your high school. You are in uni now. That's more relevant. Plus I'd assume that the Academic Entrance Award was probably for high school achievement. All your professional life experience is in Dublin, Ireland. I wouldn't keep repeating it on the right side.

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Remove relevant course work, these subjects look like core courses to your degree. "Quant subjects" is not descriptive. Low impact. I'd only add unique electives.
Consider just putting "Candidate 2017" for your Uni. People only really care to know when you are expected to graduate (to consider you for FT)
Remove your high school. You are in uni now. That's more relevant. Plus I'd assume that the Academic Entrance Award was probably for high school achievement.
All your professional life experience is in Dublin, Ireland. I wouldn't keep repeating it on the right side. I'd only use this format if there is variation. Otherwise, you are bringing un-due attention to the fact that you've never left the city your entire professional life.
Large Commercial Prop. Valco - "which were then included in final pitch" is weak impact. As is "Constructed graphs". At the very least say "Created presentation materials for X, outlining [strategic value / the story]"
Conditional formatting? How does that streamline a database of targets by 88%?
Be more specific than "researched and analyzed". Did you use DCF to compare intrinsic value? Some other methods? WACC analysis? SoTP?
"Selected" stocks screams of cherry picking. How did your whole portfolio do (or at least what you were responsible for)?
Personally, I prefer spelling out numbers less than 10. "after five months"; "over seven colleges"; "top three"
"Secured EUR3,500 in sponsorship"... Was that for you? Or did you help organize? What was the criteria?
Some of your %'s for impact are for metrics that sound iffy at best: 25% increase in likes? "social media presence" by 30%? At least be specific about language. Do you mean clicks? Impressions? Connections? (unique) Page views?
1st year rep - I would say "top three of X". Top three of three is not impressive. Be clear.
Remove space after "All" in "All -Ireland musical instrument"

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Thanks for your advice, much appreciated. I've probably removed too much information from my original resume just for privacy reasons and as a result the one i had posted was quite vague.

I've updated a new version now and hopefully using your advice it has improve it a whole lot.

I've added the quantitative subjects under relevant modules as I feel the course name Economics and Finance wouldn't justify the amount of maths we actually cover. Would I be wrong to assume this? Should I just scrap that all together?

I hope I've re-phrased some of the experience in a more legible fashion.

If you have any further criticism please let me know.

Once again your feedback is greatly appreciated, Thanks

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Pretty Solid work experience! Excellent LC and good Extra Curricular Experience, by the looks of it your Doing Ec & Fi in UCD. I'm starting there in September. Did apply for the spring week programs?

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