Sophomore Resume - What to critique
I know theres not alot on here but could you guys tell me what to critique. Just let it go.
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Your sentence structure is poor. It's not just one thing, so short of writing it for you, I can't be more specific without going line by line and telling you what sucks. I'm too far removed from undergrad to remember if that's just how we all wrote back then, or if you have some work to do to improve your writing. Also, you don't mention in this thread or in the resume what your intended goal is, so it's hard to provide you with any feedback.
One example that is particularly glaring:
1) don't refer to the agency that way ("who's") 2) Don't use the word "helped" / "help" twice in the same sentence
Heres a more updated version. Do you think this is that bad that I wont get a shot at any internships this summer. Also my ultimate goal is to get a internship in S&T after sophomore year. Right now I am networking mostly with boutiques
http://www.razume.com/documents/21892
[quote=schube130]Heres a more updated version. Do you think this is that bad that I wont get a shot at any internships this summer. Also my ultimate goal is to get a internship in S&T after sophomore year. Right now I am networking mostly with boutiques
http://www.razume.com/documents/21892[/quote]
you definitely will not get internships with this resume.
also, your goal is to get "an" internship, not "a" internship. If you decided along the way that you didn't need to care about proper writing, you did yourself a disservice - especially if your intent was to try to break into a highly competitive field. I'm with these other guys in trying not to be mean just for the sake of being mean, but your resume is about as bad as it gets. Take it to your recruiting office and have a councilor take a first stab at it with you. Bring it back here when all you have to worry about is the content.
This is the worst shit I've ever seen. I don't even know where to start. Every bullet point is fucking abysmal...There is no way you spent longer than 3 minutes on putting this together. I try not to be a dick anymore but this is just you being very lazy.
Proof read your sentences very carefully because your resume hurts to look at. Forget S&T, you'll be lucky to land a barista gig at starbucks with that.
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