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No need for periods at the end of each dot point
Generally there isn't anything on this resume - don't you have any extra-curriculars?
Expand on the dot points to reach the other end of the page - otherwise it just sounds like you've done nothing substantial
you have a chip bag resume.
-keep all the dates on one side (your graduation date should be on the right side as well) -there's no meat to your work experiences: for example "Assisted in the acquisition of an eighty million dollar institutional client." should be discussing how you assisted in this acquisition? for all i know, you couldve just been photocopying sheets of paper and you're "assisting". add layer to your points.
Thank you so much for not putting in an objective section. For that alone, you get a SB.
You need to fill up space, as other people have said. Expand on your CFA society and fraternity. Have you held offices? Have you impacted the organizations in any way?
Expand on your job responsibilities too. "Managed a client database of over 20,000 people" - Managed how? Doing what? "Shadowed principals and received mentorship on a day-to-day basis" - What did you see them do? What did you learn? "Assisted..." & "Assisted..." - How?
In general, your resume needs to be more exciting/assertive. "Assisted" and "Worked" and verbs like that are boring.
1) It's a lot of white space. I'm not a proponent of adding an objective statement but I am a proponent of adding a quick summary which paints you in a favorable light. The statement can be 2-3 lines, and you work in language specific to the position (and job posting) connecting it to your work experience. And, it takes care of some of that blank real estate.
2) Beef up those bullet points. "Mentored by senior management on asset management principles, including client interaction, establishing portfolio objectives, and asset allocation" You get the idea. Also, good things come in threes, I think it trips off the tongue quite nicely.
3) The period issue... Not a deal-breaker either way. Personally, I do not put them at the end, but consistency is most important, as chicandtoughness mentioned.
4) Speaking of consistency, get those dates all right-align.
5) Section headings:
"Education" - Good
"Experience" --> "Professional Experience"
"Additional Information" --> Something else... "Extracurricular Involvement" maybe. "Additional Information" is pretty vanilla.
6) You have a good foundation, show us a revision.
I've revised the resume. Take a look and let me know what you think! Some bullet points I'm having trouble with expanding on. I've used the WSO resume review service and I brought it up. They suggested keeping them simple because it might seem like I'm laying it on to thick for a summer internship.
Your additional information section is just a bit odd to me.
Read "Additional Information...Computer" out loud and you'll understand what I mean. Also, I'm always of the mindset that when it comes to interests and the like, it's better to show not tell. "Sailing, marathons, firearms" isn't as engaging as "Sailed a ____ boat to _____, ran the ______ marathon, and have a _____ marksmanship ranking with [insert gun here]" and that sort of thing.
I wouldn't say that you acquired your life insurance license at age 18. That makes you sound like you think you're a prodigy or something because of a life insurance license.
There's no need to list your fraternity fundraising in two different sections
I hate listing computer skills. You can, but by reading yours I immediately asked myself "...so he can't use Word? Why would he list Powerpoint and Excel only?"
Oh, and put your emphasis and minor above your GPA
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