Cold Email Tips

I know this has been asked before, but it's always worth proofreading IMO. I am currently a sophomore with a trading internship lined up for summer '22, and am looking to get a BB IB internship next summer. My template is as follows:Hi XXXMy name is YYY and I'm currently a sophomore studying Economics at (my college). While exploring career paths within finance I've developed an interest in Investment Banking, specifically M&A, and was wondering if you could take a few moments next week to speak with me about your experiences in the industry so far. I know you're busy so I really would appreciate any time you could give me. I hope to speak with you soon.Warmly,YYYAlso, for alums of my school I want to add this.I came across your profile on LinkedIn, and noticed you also studied Economics at (my college). I would love to hear about your transition to Investment Banking from (my college).Any advice is helpfulThanks!