Resume Critique - Looking for IB or boutiques/middle-market

1. WTF is up with the nationalities at the top of your resume? Why do I care that you're peruvian? And why should it be the first thing I know about you? Kill it. Unless its a greencard issue, in which case it should go at the very bottom and it shouldn't say nationalities it should say Dual US/Peru Citizen or something to that effect

2. Kill the minor bullet. Do you really think it deserves its own bullet (i.e. an entire line on your resume). You've got 25-30 lines to use. If you had the chance to tell someone 25 things about you to get a job, would your global studies minor be one of them? THis is only helpful if you're trying to play some international angle like get a job in LATM (Shelby Jennings is a good headhunter for this btw) or ME and are also fluent in a bunch of languages. Maybe stick the minor in the same line as your major "BS in Econ-FIn., Minor in Global Studies"

3. I like that your bullets are very short and to the point, but they are not at all impactful. I'd want to hire someone who makes an impact and does more than people think they can or expect, not someone who can do what they're supposed to.

4. Why is there an INternship section and a Work Experience Section? Is your internship not work experience? This seems dumb. Consolidate it all into Work Experience and it goes ABOVE any projects.

5. You're applying for a BANKING position, why would you emphasize your CONSULTING experience considering one of the main concern resume reviewers have about banking candidates is their interest in banking and why they're interested in banking over consulting since its often the same type of candidate that would be strong for either fields. Rename this section "Related Coursework / Projects"

6. Your case description makes me want to puke. -- "Member of a group"? Why should I hire someone who was part of the group and most he can say about his role is that he was a "member". I'd want to hire someone who was the LEADER of a group, FOUNDER of a group, CHAIRPERSON of a committee. No one gives a shit about a member or a participant of anything. -- "Responsible for the development of the financial part" ??? C'mon man, I'd throw this in the trash the second I saw it. You're righting a professional document, you need to write in a formal manner. Again, even despite that, this reeks of a "Participant ribbon". "Led the development of integrated financial statements and creation of company projections" Action words, punchy buzz words that give bankers hard-ons. LED, CREATED, DEVELOPED, CONDUCTED, ASSESSED, ANALYZED -- Key presenter? How many people were in the group? What you're trying to communicate here is not that you were one of the several group members who presented, its that you PRESENTED to the company. "Presented the analysis and key takeaways to movie theater management team" You communicated your analysis to a sophisticated group of business people (not a theater owner) and made suggestions based on your conclusions. It was well received. The management team had several follow-up questions and were fairly impressed because 2 of our key observations were issues that were near term focus areas for them. Embellish if you have to, but don't blatantly lie and make shit up. Its all about presenting the best version of you.

7. Dude come on. Re: work experience section, you're not applying to be a fuckin ball boy. I understand its college work study type experience but you can describe it better than "Aided administrative assistants" i.e. was the assistant to the assistant. And your bullets need to be in intelligible phrases. "Responsible for public relations and efficiently disseminating key updates to the local news media" something to that effect

8. Holiday Inn: make the third bullet the first, make the 2nd bullet "resulting in 10% increase in profitability of X" I doubt you increased profitability of the entire hotel 10%... and if you did, why are you saying 10%? You should be saying resulting in an increase of profitability by $190,000 or whatever it is

9. How is being a research assistant an extra curricular activity? Its work experience. Seems very out of place. EC would be Finance Club, Model UN, Student Government, Flag Football, etc...

10. Computer skills, why are random words capitalized? Why does anyone give a shit that you can use DOS, Mac OS, Vista and 7? Seriously. ANd Adobe? C'mon dude. Kill that, all of it. Advanced excel is sufficient, you dont need to give examples.... also "i.e." is used for an exhaustive list... "she touched my genitals (i.e. my left and right testicles)" implies she only touched my balls, my penis was left untouched. vs. "she touched my genitals (e.g. my left and right testicles)" implies she touched my genitals, including but not limited to my balls, she very well could have touched my penis also. so your statement suggests your advanced excel skills consist of pivot tables, if statements, macros and THAT IS IT. Also there's no ' in Macros (atleast I dont think so). DOesn't seem like enlgish is your first language, I would absolutely suggest you ask an enlgish prof. you liked to proofread this for you and tell them your main concerns are spelling, grammar and punctuation since enlgish is not your native language and banking positions looks for the smallest thing to ding you on. Make sure you communicate that last point. You want these peope giving you as anal feedback as possible.

Over-all... needs alot of work. I'd read each of your bullets and say "so fuckin what".... answer that question. What makes you better than all the other candidates?

Also less is more If you have a completely blank resume with 4 words in the center of the page, 90% of people will read those 4 words. If you have a resume with 4,000 words crammed into it, barely anyone will read a meaningful amount. You want to straddle the delicate line of content rich but succint and punchy. Less is more and present things in an impactful way. Lead with powerful adjective/leadership-oriented buzz words. Order bullets in order of magnitude... most impactful, impressive points first.

Try to communicate and quantify your contributoion. Holiday Inn experience... "Supervised crew of 6 maintenance and cleaning staff members" You dont have to do it on every bullet, but it should definitely resonate with someone after reading your resume that you are someone that makes a meaningful contribution that can be tangibly felt after the fact.

Other than that... Im a stickler for this but GPA should be 3.6 / 4.0 to make the point clear that its on a 4.0 scale. Why no major GPA? If its higher than your cum. GPA, put that on there. Here's a suggestion, my Cumulative GPA was lower than my major GPA, my major GPA was a 3.9. It happened fairly frequently that an interviewer would say for example "so you were a D1 varsity athlete while maintaining a 3.9 GPA?" (impressed). I bolded my higher major GPA and put it above my cum. GPA, it still said Major GPA, so I wasn't being dishonest, I was just highlighting and focusing attention on the strong performance. ANd people automatically asumed it was my cum. GPA... I would say "well that was my major GPA, my cum. was a 3.5 or 3.6 or 3.7 or whatever..." and then launch into how demanding my commitments were and how I excelled at them both. The interviewers usually had a demeanor like "whatever, i dont care about the slight difference in your major vs. cum. GPA just tell me about how you balanced these commitments and excelled". First impressions are hard to shake, so when they see high GPA they think ohh ok, stellar student. When you correct them they stil have that over achiever perception of you and figure well thats still pretty solid. Something to keep in mind. Not just in GPA, but in general how you present yourself in your resume. Just make sure every point in your resume isnt a "ohh actually, by leader I meant I lead this one section..." "... oh actually, by fluent in 4 languages I meant I can fluently write russian but dont speak it" etc... you should live up to and outshine your resume in an interview.