Rate Resume for Breaking into UK IB (20M)

Hi WSO members and those who have already been highly successful, 

I am currently aiming to get into investment banking; I previously did my BSc at a Dutch Private Business School that particularly stands out in its Dutch c-suite network. Though highly local and boutique level scale. Mostly Executive Education.

I am currently trying to apply to Jobs and I got an offer for RSM Finance and Investment. Initially I wanted to study in the UK, but my father lost his job, and hasn't recovered in the last 3 months. Hence i've been financially supporting myself and my father. I got an offer into IESE; but could not afford the reservation fee due to a lack of cash. I keep telling myself; maybe its a sign for something better. Such as the dual master degree in RSM F&I and St. Gallen Master in Banking that RSM offers; though its extremely selective and sort of a cope.

Though, I do have lots of ECs in my opinion, and also am part of a foundation (with strong networks in New York/Boston/Massaschussets). I also quite frankly have a fully running startup that makes bespoke suits and custom oxford shoes. I created this because I loved wearing suits, I joined an Incubator for that; but left the incubator later due to financial priorities. And it generates around 2-3K per month now average; though its not sufficient to fund both living costs and a UK/US/HEC level degree.
 

Some Context: in the Netherlands it is rather unusual for someone to do serious Finance Internships at banks during the bachelors; most banks only recruit from Master level onwards; it is often described this way in vacancies.

Though, I am a little in an existential crisis; now that my plans got hit severely by my personal circumstances; do you guys have any feedback for me to focus on now to still make my dream happen? and could you please provide ruthless and honest feedback on my resume. I do expect to do some high level internships during my Master's study. 

For the record; I am a fully dutch speaker at native level, speak fluent english and intermediate (B2) German.