Hey Guys, I'm just looking for some constructive feedback. I am a senior and I have applied to some MSF programs, but I am hoping to get some sort of ER internship prior.
Anything would be helpful.
All the best,
gcjohns
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I did what an H.R. rep would do, take 20 seconds to skim to look for a reason to throw it in the trash.
Under ScoreStream you have a grammatical error - should be "implemented."
Also, I don't know the standard rule on numbers, but if it's less than 100 I think it should be typed out: "two months," instead of "2 months." Resumes are all about consistency (illustrates attention to detail) and earlier in that sentence you opted to spell out "three" instead of typing "3."
A small formatting thing, but the parenthesis under spanish is being used incorrectly and an H.R. person would certainly ding you on that. What follows a colon is either a list or an explanation/definition. Parenthesis are used to interject non-critical information to the phrase/sentence. So you essentially have a blank definition with the parenthesis present.
If you're fuzzy on punctuation rules, I'd recommend a book & not google; the internet is flooded with conflicting ideas on how to punctuate properly.
I would also get rid of the underlining throughout the resume. It's not consistent enough and feels obnoxious.
Oh another thing as I glance again, fix the GPA position of Pepperdine, make it consistent with Bentley. After that, you'll need to somehow adjust the bullet point of the 2nd mention of Pepperdine (I would anyways); it's not consistent with what is above/below it for the same position in that section.
Other than formatting/grammar junk, I would try to sprinkle in some more achievements rather than just a list of responsibilities. You have a nice set of computer skills that stick out, but I don't see a direct relation of those to your jobs. I didn't really read your resume thoroughly though, but then again I don't believe most people do.
Thanks! I really appreciate the input. I'll look at making some of those changes.
it doesn't look full. too much white space.
It's stupid, I know, but it just looks sloppy then. fill it up with more stuff.
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