Target, looking to break in to IBD SA

hahahahahah you go to NYU. I can tell by your classes. I also go to NYU. To be honest, I'm a sophomore, but my roommate is a junior going through FT recruiting and already has an offer from GS asia and interviews coming up with MS and Barcap. So what I can say about your resume in comparison to his is 1. too few bullet points per job, lots of white space in your resume (too much). I have comparable experiences and leadership experience and i have far more written in my resume. Definitely bulk it up. You can definitely say more than you have about your work experience and your leadership experience.

1. most recent dates first - in your 2nd work experience, make sure june-august 2010 is above june 2008-july 2008

hope this helps! =)

You're pretty weak for a Stern junior. Good luck, NYU just recently had a visit from JP Morgan and there were literally like 500 asians all practically begging for business cards/interviews.

PS. Use the Ibanking template from M&I.

only recently joined the throng, thanks for advice!

lrh, what's the point of telling the forum that he goes to NYU? You should consider respecting someone's anonymity...

chubbybunny: That is fucking ridiculous/hilarious.

lusceil: First thing, you will get dinged immediately because of your interests because they're boring. Making lists? Might as well tell the analyst to put you on the no interview list. Beef up your resume, and start talking to professionals in your immediate network (ie. through your Asian club). You have the numbers and the related experience to get interviews, but you need to make your resume more presentable and get your name out there.

thanks for really helpful comments -- and yes the jpm event was like an asian flea market on steroids.

in terms of making the resume more presentable, does this coincide with lrh's comment about beefing up the descriptions/bullet points--or are you talking about something more to do with aesthetics?

again thanks for the valuable insights.

Try to beef up without adding fluff.

I think it should read "Expected Graduation: May 2012". Write out all numbers that are not amounts of cash. Change the skills and interests. MS Office is not a skill it is a requirement. Fluent in English? Oh really?

good call on the english/ms office. i'll change that on my outgoing copy. thanks!

also made some changes based off previous suggestions, please take a look and advise!

haha i know you were trying to spice up your interests, but what exactly do you mean by "living in art galleries and museums"?

i think visiting works much better there, unless you're homeless of course, and actually live in art galleries...

oh oops that was an idea in the making and it flopped haha

i'm in the midst of rethinking it for the specific reason you just mentioned.

Dude....

Replicating olive garden recipes, living in art galleries?

I'm no resume reviewer but I wouldn't want to work with you if your trying to perfect fettuccine Alfredo in the pantry at 3am.

fair enough.

i'm a foodie and nutrition minor, so trying to get that across in a non-lame/non-boring way, which is apparently very lame indeed.

Bring up the fact that you have that minor in your interview. If you put nutrition under skills it can come off as weird whereas in an interview you can spin it off as an interesting part of yourself.

sounds good! thanks a lot.

i think i was trying to hard, gonna tone it down a bit and sound less weird.

Making lists was just terrible to have under interests... I don't even know what to say to that, obviously others have already taken cracks but can we really just take a look at how much was wrong with the initial version. Sometimes people wonder why they aren't getting interviews, but in this case you can definitely see why. The silver lining is that there is definitely hope due to the fact that so much can be improved...

Where is IAG??

As a Stern student you are obliged to have IAG somewhere on your resume.

Also you should take better steps to conceal your identity online.. A Chinese Stern Junior, majoring in finance and accounting, who is the president of a "Cultural club" and minoring in nutrition? Might as well just post a direct link to your facebook page too lol,

thanks for comments and critiques. really appreciate it!

as to anonymity--tried, and failed due to so and so up above. i'm not really concerned too much, though, since i'm just here to humbly ask for advice (which i've been getting a great deal of, much appreciated).

1. You describe process (I did this, I did that) very well. AT times this provides good context, but ultimately recruiters want to see the results and contributions of your efforts (research led to a revised list of high priority, actively watched stocks for the energy desk)

2. Where possible, capitalize on your specific industry and product understandings. It makes you more marketable and compelling if you can demonstrate that you are a healthcare / energy / financial institutions aficionado.