Alumni Cold e-mail

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Trying to get a fall IB internship. Here is my Cold E-mail template that I started using today. No responses so far :[. Thoughts?

"I am a rising junior at semi-target currently interning in Corp 500 FP&A. As someone learning more about finance and financial markets through this internship, I am heavily interested in the world of Mergers & Acquisitions. At this time, I would like to learn more about your experiences in the industry and your role as [position] at [firm].

I understand that you may have a busy schedule, but I would sincerely appreciate an opportunity to speak with you for 15 minutes sometime within the next week. Of course, I am more than happy to accommodate whatever time works best for you."

Thanks!

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Jul 8, 2014

What's your subject header? Mine was always [school name] student seeking advice or something like that. Maybe mention that you found their contact information through the alumni network or whatever, and don't say "sometime within the next week." Change it to "in the near future" or something less definite. I always said rising [major] junior too, that could help if it's relevant. I got a ton of responses.

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Jul 8, 2014

That helps a lot! Thanks man. Hopefully i'll have better luck tomorrow :0

Jul 8, 2014

the phrase "heavily interested" seems awkward to me. maybe "deeply interested" or "I have grown a strong interest"

Jul 8, 2014
FeedMeDealFlow:

the phrase "heavily interested" seems awkward to me. maybe "deeply interested" or "I have grown a strong interest"

Try "I have developed a strong interest"

Jul 8, 2014

also, if you said you started using it today, that doesn't mean its not working. Ive sent emails and gotten responses 1-2 weeks after i sent it. You aren't going to get a response in the same day from a banker, it takes time. and if they don't respond in 10-14 days, follow up with another email. you're on the right track though

Jul 8, 2014

Thanks for the constructive criticism guys!

Jul 8, 2014

Instead of saying "the world of Mergers & Acquisitions", just say "investment banking" ("As someone learning more about finance and financial markets through this internship, I have developed a strong interest in investment banking.") Not all IB is M&A (unless of course, you are targeting M&A boutiques, but best to be on the safe side). Also echo TechBanking's comment.

Something that people are sometimes interested in is how you found them, so you might say take out the "At this time" and replace it with something like "I came across your profile on the [alumni directory or wherever you got their contact info], and I would like to learn more about your experiences in the industry and your role as [position] at [firm]."

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Jul 9, 2014

Haha thanks for answering both my questions on the forums, CHItizen

Jul 9, 2014

A few pointers for cold e-mail:
- State your connection and/or how you got their contact info.
- Keep it brief (you have this down).
- I know others have said vague dates are better, but I had some of my best luck when identifying one or two time windows (e.g. I am available Thursday anytime before noon or Monday all day). Busy people sometimes prefer to have options narrowed down to make decisions easier.
- I also like to include a request for follow up (I.e. you're telling them what you want). Something like "please let me know if you have availability and I will gladly accommodate your schedule."

Just my .02.

Mar 12, 2020

Thanks for the tips.

Jul 9, 2014

I'm about to PM you the hook, line and sinker. Of opening lines for an email.

Jul 10, 2014

Wouldn't mind you PMing me this as well, if you'd be willing that is.

Jul 12, 2014

Can I get that PM as well?

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Aug 14, 2018

Could I also ask you for this in a PM? Greatly appreciated! Hope you all are well on this thread - it's from a while back.

Aug 14, 2018

Can you please send it to me as well! Greatly appreciate it!

Nov 29, 2018

If you have time, would you mind PM me for that. Much appreciated for it!

May 29, 2019

Late to the game, can you PM this as well.

Array

Jun 18, 2019

Can you PM it to me as well?
Thanks

Mar 14, 2020

If I'm not too late, could you PM me that as well

Jul 10, 2014

I have sent a bunch of cold emails to alums the past few weeks and have met a couple of MDs, Ds, associates from different banks. However, I don't think there is much they would do for you. Most of them will just forward your CV to HR, which will not make too much a difference. I don't know what can you get out of these meetings to help you get interviews.

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Jul 10, 2014

Then you should really take a step back and look at whether you are approaching it effectively. I know that I got a lot of interviews that I otherwise wouldn't have through networking, and I'm sure that's true for many others on this forum as well.

Jul 11, 2014

Really? Any tips? I think those people I met was honest and they told me they have not worked with me, so they cannot make a recommendation.

Jul 12, 2014
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Jul 12, 2014