Would you all kindly critique my cover letter? I am applying for an Analyst position at a middle market bank. I followed the guidelines @PatrickBateman1" laid out in this post:
https://www.wallstreetoasis.com/forums/check-ib-c…
Thanks in advance for your time. The draft is linked below:
Original: http://docdro.id/xDAp1lD
Revision 1: http://docdro.id/0v0rQ2N
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There are a few grammar mistakes e.g. "The reason I am wanting to move" should be "The reason I'd like to move" also, the sentence "My exposure to energy sector companies has been .........." is grammatically incorrect, I'd suggest you to play around with it.
There are other grammar mistakes, so I'd recommend you to download the free version of Grammarly (it's a Google Chrome extension that basically corrects common grammar errors) -- it's been pretty useful for me so far.
Otherwise, the content is good, I just think you should work on flow and grammar.
I appreciate the feedback. Just downloaded the extension and updating now.
Cover letters are barely read, so don't sweat it too much. Make sure you fix spelling & grammar errors, though, as they can get you dinged if they're too blatant.
Thanks for the feedback.
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