Applying for a private equity job this summer- please help edit summer internship job description

I interned at a fund-of funds this summer (so we invest in private equity/ venture capital/ and growth equity funds) please help w the way I'm describing my job!!

____ Private Equity, Investment Management Analyst

• Conducted due diligence report to assess potential venture capital fund manager, advising against a dilutive detail after constructing a comprehensive portfolio evaluation model and meticulously tracking KPIs of manager’s prior fund performances
  • Incorporated financial modeling and valuation of top drivers in potential target’s prior funds, identified manager’s alignment with market trends in early-stage venture sector, benchmarked manager’s performance against competitors in the market, and detailed risks of investment decision
  • Presented investment thesis to senior investment professionals, providing strategic insights and analysis
• Synthesized financial analysis, macroeconomic research, and stakeholder insights to perform in-depth analysis of fintech and blockchain sectors, working to optimize investment strategies in these dynamic markets
• Performed thorough industry research and comparable company analysis on potential co-investment opportunity in edtech sector

Thank you!!