Please critique my finance resume
Here is the link to my resume: http://www.razume.com/documents/27682
Any feedback is greatly appreciated (examples are very helpful). Also, what type of job do you think I can land given my experience? Which jobs in finance should I aim for?
Under your University Finance Club your first bullet point is really weak. You are just saying you looked at financial statements and pulled out a few numbers. Your first bullet point should always be your strongest, with weaker ones to follow.
Third bullet point under University Finance Club you start with the word "Plowed." This is pretty funny, but I would change that.
Your fourth and fifth bullet points are your strongest, move to the top.
I need to close my laptop now, but hope this gets you started.
The major thing that stands out to me is that your work experience as a bank teller is mostly just explaining what kind of work you did. Surely in 5 1/2 years you've done something of note (improved a process, made successful recommendations, etc.). I had a job as a janitor on-campus for about a year in college and even in that position I could point to some things that I had done to improve the job or to better the overall results. I know in 5 1/2 years you can list out more accomplishments. Everyone already kind of knows what a bank teller "does", so tell us what you did well.
Same thing with the university finance club--you just explained what you "did", not what you accomplished, learned or improved.
Great input. Would you be able to provide an example of an accomplishment that goes beyond the jurisdiction of your job? Also, as far as my accomplishments in the Finance Club, I only utilized the club for particular workshops pertaining to finance such as modeling, intro to finance, corporate fin. etc because I was unable to take these classes in my major coursework. Should I list these courses as workshops instead?
For me, as a 19-year-old janitor (and this wasn't on my resume, this is just an example), I didn't just clean floors and bathrooms. We had students there who would work with us for community service. "Managed community service volunteers by training them in their jobs, directing them in their tasks and overseeing work and work results."
After 5 1/2 years, I'd imagine you've done something like this: "Trained 10 new employees and managed their work during the training phase." "Recommended and was granted approval for updating software to improve the speed and accuracy of our system." "Oversaw the transfer of our paper-based business to a fully electronic system." "Opened $10 million in new depository accounts." "Assisted loan officers in closing on $15 million in new loans." "Developed strong relationships in the community, specifically with hundreds of repeat customers."
The numbers, such as $10 million in new deposits or $15 million in new loans can be good, educated guesses. Don't lie through your teeth, but in your mind make strong, educated guesses ("hmm, maybe about $5-10 million in new commercial loans I originated or helped originate) and put down the high end of your estimate. A resume is meant to put your best foot forward.
really weak in general... Include lots of numbers in your resume. ex) what were the figures? how many employees did you train? estimate of how many bank transactions you processed (should be tons assuming you worked here for long time...)
results of your "University Business Plan Competition" (elaborate on this... even if you didn't win, you can still say "candidate for finalist") Also, start your first bullet point with "led 5 students ~~~~~~" instead of saying thought up idea ~~~~~
"How to analyze a 10k" does not sound like a class name...
University business plan competition and university finance clubs are missing "location" and "duration" (make the formats identical)
Lastly, as a space filler, include a line at the end about your personal interests ex) fishing, cooking, surfing, reading, football... etc...
To address the "How to analyze a 10k", you are right it was not a class but a workshop in the Finance Club. Where should I include this?
Thank you for the rest of your input. It is very helpful.
Where are you trying to get a job/what industry? I hate to be an a-hole here, but this resume is really not competetive for i-banking and other "sexy" finance disciplines.
If you are trying to get into said disciplines, you really should look into getting a masters in finance. I just look at your resume and see it lacks substance. Your bullet points also state general duties that make it sound like you didn't accomplish/improve anything. Hope this wasn't too harsh, that's not my intent, just wanted to add a realistic perspective.
I am also wondering what industry you are trying to break into. The resume looks good from not really reading too closely, but I was wondering if you did something more finance related to discuss or highlight on resume in a professional sense. Also, the bullet points seem to bodged information for some of the experience listed and the resume goes to a second page. Use the M&I guide as template and see how you can condense some of the information on your resume.
What industry could I possibly break into with my current credentials? I'm not looking for anything in particular, only entry-level roles to gain more experience and to network. I know I do not want to be in a sales orientated role, I'd much rather do something analytic or consultative. I'm hoping to find some guidance here concerning that.
Big ups to you for lasting more than one year in a teller role. I had an internship in high school that included some teller work. Absolutely hated it.
Big ups to you for lasting more than one year in a teller role. I had an internship in high school that included some teller work. Absolutely hated it.
Hence the reason why I want to leave retail banking haha any exit opportunity I can find that pays decent I will take to get out.
I know there is a huge Chinese wall between the retail side of the bank and the side that you want to be in and that it is sometimes hard to network within the bank (since you don't want to step on any toes and risk your current job). Last I checked, there was a mentorship program of some sort at your current company. It's somewhere in the system...find it...look for people who are looking for mentees...read their bios and initiate a conversation with someone.
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