Critique my cold email template
I'm a freshman at a Canadian target school, trying to get an internship for the summer. As per a lot of the advice I see here, I'm gonna be going for search funds, small PE/VC shops and PWMs. Here is thetemplate that I will be using:
I hope this email finds you well. My name is XXXX and I am a first year XXXX student at XXXX. I found your contact information through source and am reaching out to learn more about your career in Industry.
Recently I have been attending XXXX at XXXX, which so far has taught me some intriguing finance techniques. I’ve developed an interest in analyzing companies, which prompted me to start forming my own investment ideas and exploring various careers in capital markets.
Is there anything I can change to make this better?