10/22/17

Hi guys, I'm an undergrad trying to secure a summer internship. I found a recruiter at Oliver Wyman through LinkedIn, and found the firm's email format elsewhere online. I proceeded to email him this:

Dear _name___,
I am a sophomore at Rutgers University, currently studying Industrial Engineering in the Honors Academy. I am writing to you because I am strongly considering consulting as a career path upon graduation, and I would like to gain legitimate industry experience through an internship during the summer of 2018. Oliver Wyman specifically seems to be the ideal place to cultivate experience, as research has taught me that it is a prestigious, successful firm - furthermore, the culture clearly promotes free thinking through the lack of hierarchal structure. The value placed on energetic and passionate employees is also definitely an attracting factor, as I feel that I embody both traits. Genuinely, I believe that I could thrive in such a learning environment, and that I would be able to gain valuable, applicable skills from an internship at Oliver Wyman.

Personally, I am a good student, with a strong quantitative background. This, coupled with my exceptional interpersonal skills, makes me confident that I can find success in a professional environment. Attached is my resume - please let me know about any further steps I should take, and about any opportunities to meet in person, perhaps to tour a location, or to interview. Thank you in advance.

Respectfully,
_ my_name____

What do you guys think? I'm obviously one of the more inexperienced users, so rip me apart if necessary. Also any general internship advice would be greatly appreciated.

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11/14/17

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10/22/17

The OW campus recruiters are going to be pretty prioritized with their target school candidates and likely will ignore your email. You're better off reaching out to people who work at OW (find something in common if possible: Rutgers alumni, same major, same city/state) for an informational interview.

When sending any cold email regardless, you should keep it pretty short. There are a lot of guides on this site but in general, keep it to 2-3 paragraphs with 2-3 sentences each, max. Give a quick intro of who you are, move on to why you want to speak with that specific person, and then you can offer a few different times over the next 2 weeks that you can speak. You definitely don't have to be that formal either.

10/22/17

Got it. The recruiter I emailed actually is a Rutgers alum. Thanks for the advice!

10/22/17

I don't think it's a bad starting point. (I'm not an expert, basically regurgitating advice I got from somebody I trust, because my first cold email drafts looked exactly like this)

Avoid referencing the firm's prestige directly. If you want to stroke egos, the other things you mentioned about the company should suffice.

You need to tell a little more about yourself. Just 2 or 3 things to catch the eye, and emphasize how you can contribute. What makes up your strong quantitative background? Can you write code, run a regression, or can you write formal proofs? Do you have high standardized test scores? Did you draw up models in excel for a class? Anything specific - brands, names, scores, etc. - is a good thing.

Additional note: 'lack of hierarchical structure' sounds like you're calling out management, even though I know what you're saying. Change it to a positive instead of a 'lack' - something like how they entrust additional responsibilities to the analysts is going to be better.

10/22/17

Understood - thanks for the response.

10/22/17

Will it sound juvenile if I list my standardized test scores? I got a 2300 SAT (1580/1600 CR + Math) and a 35 ACT, so I would be more than happy to share that, lmao. How can I phrase it appropriately?

10/22/17

Leave your test scores for your resume. You would only mention an accomplishment like @squiggley said to explain how it makes you a competitive candidate (in the sense of an actual skill or experience that's relevant to the position) or how it sparked an interest in the work that OW does (emphasis on the latter IMO for these cold emails).

10/22/17

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